looking behind me I saw......
The opposition charging at me with his hockey stick ready. The score is three all and it is the final. Smack! He smashes into me. I stand strong and look where the ball is. Left, right, nowhere! Then I look up and the ball is darting down at me but the opposition is at his feet too. The right half backs me up and gets the ball. I run hard to the circle and the half smacks it to me. I shoot for the goal and it goes in. It is the best feeling to have a goal.
The opposition charging at me with his hockey stick ready. The score is three all and it is the final. Smack! He smashes into me. I stand strong and look where the ball is. Left, right, nowhere! Then I look up and the ball is darting down at me but the opposition is at his feet too. The right half backs me up and gets the ball. I run hard to the circle and the half smacks it to me. I shoot for the goal and it goes in. It is the best feeling to have a goal.
Wow! I love the language in your writing. You really know how to make your writing intresting.
ReplyDeleteSo well done.
Hello Billy,
ReplyDeleteI have been very lucky to have two 100WC entries from St Mary’s School. You must have some very creative writers in Mosgiel. :)
This is different to other stories I have read. Rather than ghosts or dragons or other such creatures, you’ve used the prompt to describe a game of hockey. This is a very well written recount of a game I think you may have played. Do you play hockey?
Have you taken some time to look at the entries of anyone from another school and perhaps left a comment for them? The 100WC is a great opportunity to share stories and comments.
@RossMannell (Team 100WC)
Teacher (retired), N.S.W., Australia